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Exercise in Writing Concise Sentences

Directions: Rewrite the following sentences in the text-areas provided. When you are finished with each sentence (or, if you wish, wait until you've done them all), click on Grammar's Version, which will reveal how we might have rewritten the sentence to achieve a more concise statement. If you try to cheat by looking at Grammar's version first, your computer will blow up and your name will be published in a list of ne'er-do-wells on the front page of the Jakarta Post. There is, however, no single right answer to these rewrites, and if you come up with a clearly improved version, please write us email.

1. At this point in time we can't ascertain the reason as to why the screen door was left open. 1. At this point in time we can't ascertain the reason as to why the screen door was left open.

2. My sister, who is employed as a nutritionist at the University of Michigan, recommends the daily intake of megadoses of Vitamin C. 2. My sister, who is employed as a nutritionist at the University of Michigan, recommends the daily intake of megadoses of Vitamin C.

3. Basically, in light of the fact that Congressman Fuenches was totally exhausted by his last campaign, there was an expectation on the part of the voters that he would not reduplicate his effort to achieve office in government again. 3. Basically, in light of the fact that Congressman Fuenches was totally exhausted by his last campaign, there was an expectation on the part of the voters that he would not reduplicate his effort to achieve office in government again.

4. It is to be hoped that we discover a means to create an absolutely proper and fitting tribute to Professor Espinoza. 4. It is to be hoped that we discover a means to create an absolutely proper and fitting tribute to Professor Espinoza.

5. There is a desire on the part of many of us to maintain a spring recess for the purpose of getting away from the demands of our studies. 5. There is a desire on the part of many of us to maintain a spring recess for the purpose of getting away from the demands of our studies.

6. Joe was an honest and hard working man. Basically, he never gave much consideration to sitting idly about, doing nothing constructive. (Rewrite as one sentence.) 6. Joe was an honest and hard working man. Basically, he never gave much consideration to sitting idly about, doing nothing constructive. (Rewrite as one sentence.)

7. What is your basic understanding of predestination? 7. What is your basic understanding of predestination?

8. At what point in time will a downturn in the stock market have a really serious effect on the social life of people as a whole? 8. At what point in time will a downturn in the stock market have a really serious effect on the social life of people as a whole?

9. I would call your attention to the fact that our President, who was formerly the Governor of Arkansas, is basically a Southerner. 9. I would call your attention to the fact that our President, who was formerly the Governor of Arkansas, is basically a Southerner.

10. There are more than a million fans who desperately want the Hartford Whalers to stay in the city. 10. There are more than a million fans who desperately want the Hartford Whalers to stay in the city.

11. Bothered by allergies, a condition that made them sneeze, some of the preschool children had sinus troubles that caused them to miss several days in nursery school this spring. 11. Bothered by allergies, a condition that made them sneeze, some of the preschool children had sinus troubles that caused them to miss several days in nursery school this spring.

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QUIZ Exercise in Writing Concise Sentences

QUIZ
Exercise in Writing Concise Sentences